11. Who has "power" in your text?How does that power get shown?
In the book, "When you reach me" by Rebecca Stead people like the main character Miranda have power over poor people like the minor character " The Laughing man. I think the main character should focus on being nicer to him. The man who is less superior should try to be more superior. Therefore,the main
character Miranda has power over poor people like the minor character "
The Laughing man."
Miranda is being mean to the poor guy. She is acting all high classy to him all because he is a low class guy. He should act as if he is more superior. He should should try to get a job. Miranda is around my age and got a job. He is a older guy, which is a normal age to work for money, so he should get a job so maybe could become more higher class and have a bed at least, instead of sleeping under the mailbox. The man even acts as if he is less superior. Who is less superior? should not be a question. No one should be superior of another person.Therefore, poor people should be recognized.
In the book, "When you reach me" by Rebecca Stead people like the main
character Miranda have power over poor people like the minor character "
The Laughing man. I think the main character should focus on being
nicer to him. The man who is less superior should try to be more
superior. Therefore,the main
character Miranda has power over poor people like the minor character "
The Laughing man." He
should act as if he is more superior. He should should try to get a
job. Miranda is around my age and got a job. He is a older guy, which is
a normal age to work for money, so he should get a job so maybe could
become more higher class and have a bed at least, instead of sleeping
under the mailbox.
Your thesis statement is very clear- good job on that! But like I said on your last post, there is a lot of repetition going on. I feel like your conclusion paragraph was repeating the exact words you had used in the rest of your essay. I also think it would be great if you really elaborated on your evidence. Giving the reader a look into your own mind makes for a stronger reading response.
ReplyDeleteI think your writing has improved. But, i agree with Jolene in that you should try to add less repetition. Perhaps you could add kore specific details because then your writing will sound more formal and will be more professional. Other than that, i think you did a good job.
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